Tune what I made

Hi all. This is my first post. :)

A track

I didn't plan on posting this one, as it was something of an experiment and not really representative of the sound that I'm starting to develop for myself- for starters, I usually use more than just one four-bar melody (honest). But Live was being a dick about rendering and this was the only full-length track I had already rendered on my hard disk (this actually is only a mixdown, there's several things I changed in the final version). I'm pretty new to the digital music lark (only started with any degree of seriousness over the summer), and I suppose I'm looking for crits and support.

Oh yeah, the track was made entirely in Live 5.1, alll midi voices created from scratch and no samples. I don't even own a keyboard, I used the computer keyboard to input midi :P.

Yes, well done man. That was amazing and you are truly a god among men.

i couldn't dowload it from there. why don't you get a googlepages account? if you don't have gmail just email me and I will send you an invite. You can upload up to 100mb worth of mp3s.

Does this work?

Rap_Motherfucker.mp3Fetching info...

Y'know what, I just listened back to this and it is pretty shit. I do better stuff than this, sometimes.

Still gimme some crits tho.

You asked for it Bitch. Heres me crits: sounds like loud. I think you should probly make the bass drum a tad bit louder and take down the bass. But I like the overall style. Its pretty neet. I think the bee[ps be cool. nice drum samples they be a bit clicky. The nesxt time you should think maked the drums more pounchy for this type of tune.

for some reason it reminds me of nightrider. the videogame. I agree with bubba loud in the mix, had to adjust the speakers. props on the chip sounds...8 bit 4 evah!!!

when the beat comes back @ 2:08 it should be way more violent, wiith other sounds and dunno something worth the wait. something loud.