My first few stabs at songwriting

Hey all, so i recently starting working on this crappy expired demo version of FLstudio5 and cranked out a few 'tracks' i thought i would post up here for feedback.

I would like you all to know that at this point i am not trying to craft perfectly flowing lengthy proper pieces, rather, I am just trying to flesh out the basic principles of beat, rhythm and melody. Be honest, tell me what you don't like, but also tell me what you like.

except for the synth, all of the sounds are samples i recorded in my garage.

also I have a few problems here and there with FL, esp with live recording, so there are a few glaring errors in the tracks.

Bazone:

Personally i really enjoy the beat and melody in this one, not sure about the transition partway through but i will definately flesh this into a proper track at some point

http://www.zshare.net/audio/1233414219d7f3e1/

Plural:

Likely my most polished track. Its actually the one I have the least complaints about, I'm quite pleased with how it turned out.

http://www.zshare.net/audio/12333978cef00fdf/

123456:

My favourite concept for a track, although it turned out somewhat shallow, I still enjoy parts of it.

http://www.zshare.net/audio/12376213d2f1be8a/

Gaet:

My attempt at a more speedy percussion driven track:

http://www.zshare.net/audio/1237634327d12d3f/

Untitled track in progress:

More speedy, dark sounding track

http://www.zshare.net/audio/123764462bc66c4c/

so thanks in advance for the advice, hope you enjoy my tracks and can provide me with some helpful advice for improving my abilities.

in general, one thing that i noticed that was consistently missing from all the tracks: low end. need some nice big bassy thuds in those rhythms. maybe take some more care with the mixing too. on all the tracks, but on plural especially, most things are the same volume, and the peak volume overall is low. i'm not suggesting that you crank it up, but you lots of room to move around there, to bring things to the front and make others more subtle.

more specifically, in 123456, i found the squeaky vocals to be kinda annoying. in untitled, the speedy melody that comes in later in the track is somewhat repetitive and grating, and it doesn't really jive with the other elements. i'd say untitled was my least favorite of the bunch, and bazone was my favorite.

good start though. better than my first few probably. :) keep it up! you have good ideas and good sounds going on.

yeah i'm still working on getting a good strong bass going but i havent really figured it out in FL yet

thx for the feedback

ah, sorry i didn't listen to the three that you sent me, i've been a bit busy heheh. i'll get around to it this weekend i hope!

i only downloaded the first one as my nets being fuckin slow as, and i like it, as said above it needs more lows, but it could definately be turned into a decent sounding track.

keep it up

thx all sorry if 5 is too many at once lol

my computers don't get along with zshare

i would like to hear these though

why not just upload to the board

thats an interesting theory tht! elaborate...

just use your intuition with the attachments panel of the posting window

you get 500mb i believe and you can always delete old attachments

i cant get it to work, it just says uploading forever even on 50kb files

these are my favourite songs on ekt forum ever