Two works in progress

criticisms appreciated

both tracks are cool at their cores, interesting samples and chopping/editing. the first track...when the beat comes in it's a bit of a let down. the main sample has this awesome, lazy swing to it, but the beat doesn't play on that strength, so it sounds a bit stiff. it sounds like you were trying to do a somewhat unconventional rhythm, which i think the track does need, but the beat you've got now doesn't suit the track. personally, i'd say go for more of a twisted take on a southern bounce style beat to play off that wonky circus-y sample that forms the base of the track. but maybe that's just me.

the second track has a lush melody that works really well with the jazzy, ride-heavy drums. i wouldn't do anything to what you have already personally, but since i think a lot of your tracks end before they've really hit their stride, i'd suggest maybe skip ahead in your sequencer to after your song stops and start constructing a new track using the exact same samples and tempo that you've already got...then maybe if you come up with something you like, find a way to bridge those two sections together and make them flow into each other.

i completely agree about the drums in the first one, i had tapped out a bd line with more swing but for some reason scratched it for something more straightforward, its definitely a placeholder until i come up with something that fits better. im currently writing more interesting/more developed melodies to carry the second track further, just thought i would share these as they are. thanks for the comments cats!!

I like both tracks so far. The snares in the first one are a bit too much, and the choppy intro in the second track is not exactly my thing (especially because I want to go to bed in a few minutes lol). I can hear that the overall 'foundations' of both tracks are good.

some more

Listening to deededfdf right now. Do you know what the proper term for this sort of rhythm is? (that can be counted as either a super fast 6/8 or 4/4?) Is there one? Anyway, I like that rhythm, and have never written a song with it myself. I'm not a big fan of the synth sounds on this one, but I like the idea. Nice stereo spread.

Checking out eerie. Now this one's got some nice sounds. I like the background textures, arpeggio melodies... it's alittle bit trip hop and a little bit cinematic, appropriate for the season. This would fit in well with one of the old Halloween movies.

Humphry: I like the blend of organic instruments here and where they sit spatially. It sounds like a loop still waiting for a lead melody and arrangement, or rap vocals as may be the case. But I like the loop itself.

I downloaded your album zip, will listen when I've got some time.

Humphry is the shit, right up my alley lol.

not a huge fan of deededfdf to spastic for me.

You sure have a unique taste in textures and sound choice! Your production is amazingly good sounding in a way that even on very nice headphones it sounds top-notch! Lovely!

Also, someheat is so fucking hot, though i agree with the drums needing some tweaking. But everything else oh man, the shit.

someheat: very enjoyable... love the drums, the pace, the SPACE... the horns and voices go very well.. quite a nice piece of work.

softguitar: i didn't really like how the guitar was all cut up... just a stylistic differences.... but i like this track. its kind of poppy i guess, but its emotional evocative and nice... full, lustrous even. very nice once again! progresses very nicely all the way through.

deededfdf: not really my style. 8-bit beginning doesn't sit well with me. it becomes quite a full sounding track and then when the beat meshes in, i start to like it all more. as the track goes on in general, i like it more. would like to hear to next cut.

eerie320: TOTALLY your style... if i had just heard this without knowing who made it, i'd think it was yours. fantastic track.

humphry: nice, but not a whole lot of variation or dynamic range.

stilk: hot track. loving this. its really fucking good... very different and cool... there isn't anything at all i would change