Song.

Hello my dear friends.

I would like to share this song with you. It probably needs a bit more work, but this is pretty much the gist of it. It needs a title too.

I would appreciate your feedback very much.

tea_160.mp3 7.17 MB · 13 downloads

there's too much shit at 3:06, but besides that I have enjoyed it thanks

Feels too much like a bunch of parts strung together to me. I think what it needs is a more prominent theme & atmosphere to hold it together. In some parts it feels like new elements are being introduced just to keep the song progressing, but they should instead feel like a natural evolution of (or meaningful counter to) what has come before.

Thanks for listening.

You can hear more at www.myspace.com/jacobgreenmusic if you want, but the songs up there aren't that good. Might put some newer songs up there but nobody really cares for Myspace anymore.