Sing on that!

If anyone wants to donate some vocals or an idea regarding song structure, i'm eager to read about it.

http://soundcloud.com/amon-shiffrin/shimmerin

old horror movie sample intro

verse

chorus

verse

chorus

harmonica solo

verse

chorus

chorus

surprise techno beatdown outro

edit: no real suggestions, I dig the main synth line though

live words from my stream of consciousness, whist listening to your track:

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im stuck, in a sea of sand

but the light it helps me glide

im frowning, at the sun

shielding my view from the glare

 

oh it shines

oh it shines

but the sand

it impedes my movements

hmmm, as far as structure goes, I think dragging out the bit with no drums and cutting down the end section with drums would be nice. like something that end feel like more of a payoff, it sort of feels like it plateaus a bit early there. as far as vocals go, maybe something to give some sort of counterpoint to the synth melody, I dunno maybe if there was some sort of multitracking pitch effect action going on, where it started out mostly normal, but then for the first part where the drums mostly disappear, it drops in pitch and becomes mostly inaudible, but then for the 2nd synth solo it starts to come back and then goes nuts for the finale? I dunno, you've got a nice foundation to play around with here, experiment and I think you will find the song you're looking for.

Thank you guys very much for your suggestions. I'll definitely keep those in mind, when I can work on the song again.

At the moment i can only use this old notebook, which doesn't really allow to use live dammit