I need some help with this

I know theres a track in here somewhere but I just cant seem to drag it out.

Any suggestions?

http://soundcloud.com/anflec/upwards-demo

its really nice but there should be more of a climactic build or at least some series of climactic moment. maybe this isnt your thing but i just think its too atmospheric atm

I would probably tweak that arpy sounding synth out to really get it singing by the end, maybe addd in some reverb on it as it progresses.

It's nice, but ya, kinda just a little jam thing right now.

I would have LOVED that tune to grow dancier with the growing synths from the first half. Seriously.

  On 7/22/2010 at 4:58 AM, Enter a new display name said:

I would have LOVED that tune to grow dancier with the growing synths from the first half. Seriously.

Actually thats not a bad idea. I think I might re-gate the start and have it play a more dominate role.

I back the suggestions given in this thread.

I might have actually made it worse

http://soundcloud.com/anflec/upwards-2nd-demo-i-think-i-made-it-worse

  On 7/31/2010 at 3:22 AM, chassis said:

I might have actually made it worse

http://soundcloud.com/anflec/upwards-2nd-demo-i-think-i-made-it-worse

the beat is a bit strict and not fluid, but i really like the arpeggiations and i think you should keep working on this, it could be something special

The kick sounds like a mouse playing the drums. Needs more beef.