A fully completed song

Well, I have never spent as long on a song as this song. Made it late last year and hit a dead spot after that. I should have spent more time on the drum programming but what the hey...sock it to me.

+ this is cool, nice bass sound/line, some very nice touches, good pads.

– the break has been used way tooooo much, try using that as a layer and get a more original break/snare. little progression overall.

sounds like the opening bars of a massive tune. suggestions: a lower, fatter, distorted bass following the main bass line after the first break down. coupled with a huge crashy break, these 2 would realy lift the second section up into something that makes the assembled throng shit their pants in glee.

I found this track a bit boring towards the end - i think there's some wicked sounds in there and some good programming, just not enough progression for me. Needs more breakdowns and shit. Nice rollin' beat though, but agree with Wasps about it's overuse. Cheers for the track though!

  wasps said:

+ this is cool, nice bass sound/line, some very nice touches, good pads.

– the break has been used way tooooo much, try using that as a layer and get a more original break/snare. little progression overall.

 

sounds like the opening bars of a massive tune. suggestions: a lower, fatter, distorted bass following the main bass line after the first break down. coupled with a huge crashy break, these 2 would realy lift the second section up into something that makes the assembled throng shit their pants in glee.

Yeah I agree with Waspy re most of his comments except I'll ad that I wasn't majorly keen on the bassline - to me it just was a bit too basic note wise (okay sound though). You do have some pretty reasonable overlays, synths and layers so thumbs up there.

As Wasps said what this needs essentially is a monster break and probably after about 64/128 bars of music. Perhaps also some fast piano type stabs ala Amen Andrews' 'Evil Rave' - just a thought.

The expectation/tension surrounding a monster break/more beats is what makes hardcore/jungle/two-step work. As it stands it sets out its stool but fails to deliver the goods. Essentially if you can beef up/expand the beats and add more layers; then that'll take it to the next level.

Thanks a lot for listening guys. Great advice from all. Yep, my number one battle is trying to get progression into the proceedings of any song I make. I just struggle with it so bad. Hopefully I can salvage the hard drive from my old pc and hook it up to this one, because I'd really like to see this through. (I never normally work on tracks after I "finish" them)

And as luck would have it, I got that Amen Andrews track a few days ago so I'ma go listen intently and start plotting :jedi:

:kiss: for all y'all

i feel the same way. track feels to empty, it's a really nice start though. maybe layering the drum tracking, adding more in to make it more full, and various elements throughout the entire thing. nice track, it's got potential.

I pretty much agree with everyone else's comments, and no offense, but I am just really fucking tired of the amen. You might want to use a more obscure break and use the amen as an accent to just kind of spice it up and add dynamics.

You also might want to think about compressing the drums. I just don't think they sound punchy enough.

It has the groundworks of a great dnb tune, but you should add some more dynamics and progression.

Oh, and I full-heartedly agree with distorting the bass slightly.

Hey thanks guys. I am actually looking forward to working on this some more now!

I hope I dont sound snarky or nerdy but it was actually the Think break(s), not the Amen, but I know what ya mean, man. And yeah, whatever it was, it's overused! But it's useful to get some kinda footing. If that makes sense. Well, props all.

Have a nice day and shit!

Oop :pinch:

My bad.

i like the idea of layering a deeper-octave bass in there. something squelchy and sustained would be cool maybe.

nice use on your synths to get a real percolating effect in teh panning and velocity, i think that really helps the drums flow well.

that vocal sample or whatever going on past the 2:00 mark is really nice, and would be a great thing to bring up in the mix more to sort of fill out this sparse track.

i really dig teh overall sound though man, really chill as it is.

encey