I made a fucking awesome dance track and I think YOU should hear it!

I cranked this out in about 3 hours. I think it's done.

http://soundcloud.com/pselodux/twelver-remix

Can't wait to try this out in a live setting. I think I'll do a bunch of remixes like this for a full-on dance action live set, fuck yes!

Anyway, here's the original for comparison:

http://pselodux.bandcamp.com/track/twelver

modey is awesome

call me, puppy

pretty awful. sorry.

reminds me of sonic the hedgehog on sega genesis.

not a bad thing.

Mr. Puppy!!

Definitely not done... It's not bad, but the synths need some work. It also reminds me of Sonic the Hedgehog, in a good way.

Could definitely be a bumpin' live track... Just keep workin' on tightening it up!

Synths need work..care to explain? Keep in mind this was originally written in 2004 with a chiptune mindset.

I think I'll remove the lead from the first half of the track—I kinda want to emphasise the syncopated arpeggios in that section.

LUDD: ok buddy. I like it, and that's all that matters, huh? Well, as long as I can make people dance I'm happy.

  On 5/11/2012 at 11:47 PM, modey said:

Synths need work..care to explain? Keep in mind this was originally written in 2004 with a chiptune mindset.

 

I think I'll remove the lead from the first half of the track—I kinda want to emphasise the syncopated arpeggios in that section.

Yeah, the lead needs to go away, and so does the chords/stabs. Keep the bass and build something new up around that. Also, it needs to be shorter. No more than 4 minutes. It also needs a better build-up. Right now it just goes on and on.

I would probably slow it down as well. Right now it's like 130 bpm, right? Try taking it down to 126 bpm and keep the drums more minimalistic.

  On 5/12/2012 at 12:16 AM, Squee said:

  On 5/11/2012 at 11:47 PM, modey said:

Synths need work..care to explain? Keep in mind this was originally written in 2004 with a chiptune mindset.

 

I think I'll remove the lead from the first half of the track—I kinda want to emphasise the syncopated arpeggios in that section.

 

Yeah, the lead needs to go away, and so does the chords/stabs. Keep the bass and build something new up around that. Also, it needs to be shorter. No more than 4 minutes. It also needs a better build-up. Right now it just goes on and on.

I would probably slow it down as well. Right now it's like 130 bpm, right? Try taking it down to 126 bpm and keep the drums more minimalistic.

Cool, thanks for the advice.. I had some ideas for the build-up, I agree that it needs a bit of work. In regards to the length, I wrote this for a live setting so the length is intentional. And I thought it was too slow actually! I'm not a big fan of slow dance music. 140-150bpm is what I like for this style.

first minute sucks, then it gets good

lol, thanks for the constructive criticism. then again, what do i expect from posting in world #1 analord ripoff subforum

  On 5/12/2012 at 7:13 PM, modey said:

lol, thanks for the constructive criticism. then again, what do i expect from posting in world #1 analord ripoff subforum

HA! Spot on.

analord copy me

Not enough 808 and 303. You need more of that. maybe add some moody detuned synths too.

kind of fun to listen to but i'm struggling to come up with a cool dance for it... i look like i'm doing aerobics

  On 5/12/2012 at 10:18 PM, tauboo said:

kind of fun to listen to but i'm struggling to come up with a cool dance for it... i look like i'm doing aerobics

heh... typical white man dance moves though innit?

I always look like I'm doing aerobics when I dance =(

Maybe I should just stick to doing aerobics...

i would remove all the chiptune-ness and use some fatter drums. or just go back to the funkyness of the original.

saying that, i really liked it. reminds me of that dancey throttle something clark 12".

Hey Modey, Sir. I didn't realize the chiptune sound was intentional. I apologize for being so vague. I also agree with that it is just a tad too long. Ur call however. It could use a better breakdown, but my personal peeve is having random vocal samples... so I'd lose that and work out something else to accent that portion. Lastly, I'm feelin' like it's a bit muddy in the later half, as it gets a bit too bombastic. It becomes difficult to distinguish all the different elements.

Upon my third listen, I do quite enjoy it. It's good fun... reminds me of the Silver Surfer flying through the cosmos at vast speeds :)

Haha, bombastic is my style man! It's nothing compared to the ridiculousness of my other recent output!

But yeah thanks for clarifying. I'm gonna work on the buildup a bit more and maybe make the intro more concise. This will probably just be a live track though so I kinda want it to stay pretty minimal, structure-wise.

And re: the vocal sample, well I dunno why I decided on it but I kinda built the original track around it.. I know it's not the best but it's oldskool Pselodux and oh boy the few fans I have sure love that oldskool Pselodux!

i liked it a lot by the second half. its like a Depeche Mode song meets chiptunes