Strange track, not sure about it

Not completely sure where I went with this one or even if it´s somewhere i wanna go..

Any thoughts?

http://soundcloud.com/hermann-3/derailed-train-of-thought

I call it "Derailed Train of Thought". Yeah I´m hilarious like that.

What a strange song. Seriously man, did you make this sober? I actually liked it though. Love the string pluck 3/4 of the way through followed by the guitar chord a little further in. Not sure if the church organ works with the lead synth as good as it could be, but it does still work to an extent.

I'd actually like to hear more like this, believe it or not.

Haha believe it or not, nicely put :)

Thanks for the thoughts! Actually yeah funnilly enough i made pretty much all of this track completely sober. Funny how it works like that.

i liked it!

there are definitely some things i love about this track. there are definitely things im not too sure about in this track. i think you could really take this to an awesome place. good style overall!

Hehe, this is very playful. The only thing I would consider changing is the guitar at 2:56 because it doesn't really fit. The chords are great but maybe replace it with a cute synth instead.

Oh, just a heads-up... at 3:33 there are 4 kicks that pops in... they sound very random. Almost as if it's a mistake.

this is pretty cool man. id say work a little bit more on the transition between the intro and main. and overall there seems to be a lack of depth to it. i feel like theres something missing from it to make it full. like in the background or something. other than that this is sweet. like Squee says, its very playful.

  On 10/28/2012 at 8:58 PM, Squee said:

Hehe, this is very playful. The only thing I would consider changing is the guitar at 2:56 because it doesn't really fit. The chords are great but maybe replace it with a cute synth instead.

 

Oh, just a heads-up... at 3:33 there are 4 kicks that pops in... they sound very random. Almost as if it's a mistake.

Yes I like that idea, I wasn´t completely sure about that guitar there anyway.

And the few random kicks there at 3:33.. Believe it or not they are intentional ;)

i quite like this. Very strange indeed. seems like it could fit in some sort of odd video game

I agree about the guitar around 2:50 but I think it could work with a more open sound. Like it is now it sounds really smothered and doesn't go that well with what I would imagine for that guitar in that precise part. I personally would have go for a more released sound, with more highs.

Apart from that I like how the guitar is integrated, it brings up a kind of originality to the sound.

Overall I really enjoyed that track and don't feel it's directionless

Particularly enjoyed the intro - looking forward to its future development.