Slice me some pie mate

All comments are appreciated!

https://soundcloud.com/clockwork-tickler/tourjing

Ya got some not bad ideas there. Like the short note with a slow attack pad coming in. At around 2:40 there was a particularly cohesive section. Listen to that part and find out for yourself what you did there and why it is good. But over all this track is very unfocused and sounds a little noodly. Which is fine, especially if you're just starting out. Get back to work then! :)

Thank you!