Guest brendyman Posted February 5, 2014 Report Share Posted February 5, 2014 (edited) I convinced my girlfriend to finally let me use her singing in one of my tracks. She wrote the lyrics and contributed vocals, and I did everything else. It's my first attempt at a chillwave type of track. Let me know your thoughts! https://soundcloud.com/brendyman/standalone-with-sierra-gergus Edited February 5, 2014 by brendyman Quote Link to comment https://forum.watmm.com/topic/82175-brendan-rincon-standalone-with-sierra-gergus/ Share on other sites More sharing options...
Thiefinger Posted February 5, 2014 Report Share Posted February 5, 2014 Nice. I like the vocal sound a lot. Great tune and lovely sounds. This seems almost too short, feels like it ended before it even began. Anyway everything I heard I liked. Maybe the low end needs something a bit more rhythmical or something? A bit more punchy kick or a synthbass? Anyway great work here! Thanks Haha Confused Sad Facepalm Burger Farnsworth Big Brain Like × Quote Link to comment https://forum.watmm.com/topic/82175-brendan-rincon-standalone-with-sierra-gergus/#findComment-2124038 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hybernation Posted February 5, 2014 Report Share Posted February 5, 2014 wow that vocal is amazing such soul!!! keep working with her remember the beach boys??? harmonies!!! if she sings in different keys over line it will sound so full if thats the feel u want?? but this is a real gem!!! gr8 stuff Thanks Haha Confused Sad Facepalm Burger Farnsworth Big Brain Like × Quote Link to comment https://forum.watmm.com/topic/82175-brendan-rincon-standalone-with-sierra-gergus/#findComment-2124246 Share on other sites More sharing options...
th555 Posted February 6, 2014 Report Share Posted February 6, 2014 The rhythm of the chords doesn't really convince me. Vocals and sidechain compression are nice though. Thanks Haha Confused Sad Facepalm Burger Farnsworth Big Brain Like × Quote Hide th555's signature Hide all signatures https://www.youtube.com/user/THkaas/videos https://thisjepisje.bandcamp.com/ https://soundcloud.com/th555 Link to comment https://forum.watmm.com/topic/82175-brendan-rincon-standalone-with-sierra-gergus/#findComment-2124685 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest The Bro Posted February 6, 2014 Report Share Posted February 6, 2014 I sort of half like it. The chords weren't really my bag to be honest. I think the vocals have way too much reverb on them personally. Mix could do with a bit more bottom end. Could be music for an indy flick or something that's what it sounds like to me. Quote Link to comment https://forum.watmm.com/topic/82175-brendan-rincon-standalone-with-sierra-gergus/#findComment-2124690 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dpek Posted February 7, 2014 Report Share Posted February 7, 2014 this is chill and nice and I can groove to it... but it's still a little simple. I reminds me of I Remember of Deadmau5 or something similary trancey, which is not a good thing. in the second half there is more meat to it but I think chill wave tracks should destroy their simple-chord melody with at least an interesting structure. try some unexpected turns and breaks in it! but still it sounds great to me mate, so don't worry about my criticism Thanks Haha Confused Sad Facepalm Burger Farnsworth Big Brain Like × Quote Hide Dpek's signature Hide all signatures https://blazgracar.com Link to comment https://forum.watmm.com/topic/82175-brendan-rincon-standalone-with-sierra-gergus/#findComment-2124893 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest brendyman Posted February 8, 2014 Report Share Posted February 8, 2014 https://soundcloud.com/brendyman/standalone-with-sierra-gergus I added some changes, but not really any changes in structure. Chillwave isn't really my area of expertise, but I totally get what you're (Dpek) saying about being reminiscent of Deadmau5. I'm one of those people who's gotten very good at being average at a bunch of genres instead of mastering a single style of music. Thanks for all the feedback, though! I haven't been here for long but I really like this place because you guys give honest feedback. All the other places I've tried to get feedback, everyone's just like "Great job mate comment on my track plz", so props to you guys for that. Quote Link to comment https://forum.watmm.com/topic/82175-brendan-rincon-standalone-with-sierra-gergus/#findComment-2125520 Share on other sites More sharing options...
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