Yukominki

:3 Konnichiwa, mina-san. Feedback?

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  On 4/7/2014 at 12:35 AM, BillyMcTreeSnap said:

:3 Konnichiwa, mina-san.

are you a 17 year old japanese girl? because if not then CUT OUT THESE VILE SHENANIGANS RITE AWAY

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Overall it has a nice overcast atmosphere, but I'm not getting a compelling melodic sense from any of the individual parts. I feel loathe to suggest less variation, because lord knows there are too many amateur idm throwaways out there relying on the same three note pad swoops, but a bit more of a clear-cut theme would get my ears perked up a bit. Heck, doesn't even have to be a repeating melody. A lil bit of rhythmic swing in the notation (as opposed to constant dispersal) goes a long ways

  On 4/7/2014 at 12:52 AM, Cryptowen said:

 

  On 4/7/2014 at 12:35 AM, BillyMcTreeSnap said:

:3 Konnichiwa, mina-san.

are you a 17 year old japanese girl? because if not then CUT OUT THESE VILE SHENANIGANS RITE AWAY

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Feedback?

Overall it has a nice overcast atmosphere, but I'm not getting a compelling melodic sense from any of the individual parts. I feel loathe to suggest less variation, because lord knows there are too many amateur idm throwaways out there relying on the same three note pad swoops, but a bit more of a clear-cut theme would get my ears perked up a bit. Heck, doesn't even have to be a repeating melody. A lil bit of rhythmic swing in the notation (as opposed to constant dispersal) goes a long ways

 

I actually am a 20 year old Japanese girl. Ai

I agree on the melodies, working on making more distinct melodies. I appreciate the descriptive advice!